Telling Women's Lives

Madison and Helen

1. Most readers considered the article “In Praise of Brevity” biased.
2. Ticket prices increased from $15-$20 to $20-$25 this year.
3. It’s essential she decides to make every semester at college productive.
4. Few indoor areas are unoccupied by students on rainy days.
5. The scene at the beginning of the film allows us to understand the two different personalities at war in Gollum’s head.
6. Marcel’s Café does not stand out from Seattle’s wide variety of French dining.
7. Students, many of whom display exam anxiety, increase sentence length to impress professors with lengthy responses.

Lauren and Andrew

1. Most readers considered the article “In Praise and Brevity” as biased.
2. Tickets this year were slightly more expensive than last.
3. Productivity is essential for all of her semesters, especially her first.
4. Most indoor areas on campus are crowded on rainy days.
5. The opening scene of the film is crucial to our understanding of Gollum’s two opposing personalities.
6. Marcel’s Cafe is mediocre amongst the wide variety of French Restaurants in Seattle.
7. Due to the anxiety brought on by exams, students tend to cram more words into sentences in hopes of impressing professors.

Revised Sentences-Luke Vith

1. Many readers criticized “In Praise of Brevity” for being biased.
2. This year ticket prices increased by $5, now ranging from $20 to $25.
3. It is essential she make all of her semesters at college productive.
4. There are few indoor areas on campus not occupied by students on rainy days.
5. The scene at the beginning is essential to understand the two different personalities in Gollum’s head.
6. Neighboring French dining restaurants in Seattle outshine Marcel’s Café.
7. Students with increased anxiety at exam time tend to cram words into sentences in hopes of impressing professors.

Allie and Hannah’s Succinct Sentences

2. Tickets raised in price from $15 to $20 last year to $20 to $25 this year.
3. She must be productive every semester of college, but especially the first.
4. Indoor areas on campus are constantly occupied by students on rainy days.
5. The beginning scene of the film helps us later understand the war of two different personalities in Gollum’s head.
6. Marcel’s Café is undistinguished among the many French restaurants in Seattle.
7. In exams, anxious students tend to write long sentences to impress their professors with their bulk.

Exercise in Writing Succinctly

Jess Jordan and Matt Fernandez

1. Most readers said the article “In Praise of Brevity” was biased.
2. Ticket prices rose $10 over the past year to $20-$25.
3. It is essential that she decide to make each semester in college productive.
4. On rainy days, students occupy most of the indoor areas on campus.
5. The beginning of the film provides necessary background about Gollum’s multiple personalities.
6. Marcel’s Cafe is no better than the wide variety of French restaurants in Seattle.
7. Anxious students tend to cram more words into sentences to impress their professors.

Neicy Myers & Leigh Moriarty: Concise Sentences

2. Ticket prices increased from last year’s $15-$20 to $20-$25 this year.

3. It is essential that she decide to make all her semesters at college—even her

first—productive.

4. On rainy days, the few indoor areas on campus are teeming with students.

5. This early scene is vital to our future understanding of the competing

personalities in Gollum’s head.

6. Marcel’s Café fails to stand out in Seattle’s long lineup of French restaurants.

7. Many students, especially those grappling with “test anxiety,” attempt to

impress professors by bolstering their sentences with unnecessary words.

Kailen Gore and Jorge Fournier’s Shortened Sentences | Class Exercise

Writing concisely — exercise from February

Without eliminating any essential ideas, revise the following sentences to make them more concise. Consider whether each word or phrase is necessary or might be shortened.

Allie Hubbard: Community Leader Profile- Shana Whitehead

Shana Whitehead is the owner/founder of Muddy Creek Café and Music Hall.

Implicit Bias-Helen Cardamone

Three quotes stood out to me in The Effects of Gender Roles, Implicit Bias, and Stereotype Threat on the Lives of Women and Girls.

1. “Our brains automatically organize the stimuli we encounter, drawing on stereotypes when we lack full information or we need to make quick decisions”

2. “Popular culture plays an important part in reinforcing these gendered associations”

3. “Definitions of beauty have significant impacts upon women in many realms. Women who do not conform to beauty norms often experience a cascade of negative consequences, in large part due to strong cultural associations of beauty with capability and positive personality traits”

Implicit bias was brought up during the movie we watched at Dr. Rubino’s house and is brought up frequently in my art history courses. What we choose to show in all forms of media becomes a somewhat pictorial normality. In order to understand the reasoning behind a producer of imagery, you must research their upbringing, medical records, relationships with family and friends, etc. All the while, this information may help the viewer understand more about the producer, which is always important, but audiences will never fully understand what was going on through the mind of the artist/producer.

Courses like WGS and papers like “The Effects of Gender Roles, Implicit Bias, and Stereotype Threat on the Lives of Women and Girls” are important. In controversial essays about feminism, gender issues, racism…if no one will speak on behalf of how imagery is bias then our society will never curb our media’s lens. In my opinion, there is always room for open discussion and improvement.

Our society must take the time to acknowledge imagery and take a personal stand on how to present oneself and how others present themselves. If research shows that their is a positive correlation between what is internationality beautiful and what is societally ‘normal’… then slandering and supporting should always be appropriate, in good humor or with good taste. It should always be okay to disagree with someone; that goes without saying.

Media provides information for our entertainment, politics, etc. If our brains automatically organize stimuli we encounter’ then shouldn’t our snap decisions of beauty be called into question during times like now. In this WGS class. During dinner conversations.